Don't be so hard on yourself, it was your first go at writing a commentary of the price action... and was a pretty good effort.
I for one, certainly know it is not an easy thing to do.
Go back to 2011/2012 in the charts forum, and have a look how rubbish some of my commentary was back then.
Amateur at best....but then again, I have written hundreds of them since.....
cheers
